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After fighting through 50 different story ideas, the boys have picked Time to Die as the script to write. They are now starting the writing process.

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Re: Pitch by Example

June 25, 2007 · by Burley Grymz · Permalink · comment on this post in the forum · Category: communiqués, technique, writing

I think that pitch is excellent. I think it totally carries through to reading, but I’m curious how his voice and energy made it better in person. And if Carrie Fisher didn’t snark at him, it must have been amazing.

One thing he did well is make the reader / viewer complicit in the story. He says:

We’re gonna send him down to South America…

I think it could be a tricky strategy to do that, but it seems to have worked for him.

As Shockah knows, I’ve been working on pitches lately, trying to hone the craft of them. I’ll have one for Time To Die up soon.