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After fighting through 50 different story ideas, the boys have picked Time to Die as the script to write. They are now starting the writing process.

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Round 7.7 [Rachel, My Dear v. Methane Madness]

March 01, 2006 · by The Urban Shockah · Permalink · comment on this post in the forum · Category: Original Version, the screenplay

Rachel, My Dear
I can see your problem with Rachel-as-architect, but I'm not sure if I like Gabe-as-contractor. (Or maybe I don't know enough about the biz to know whether that scenario is likely or believable.) But I think what's clear is that Rachel, whatever she does, needs Tha Skillz to fight the house on an intellectual level as well as a physical one. Is there another job like "architect" that could do the same job?

Maybe when he looks at the house he sees the house Rachel designed, but when she sees the house she sees a nightmare.

Heh -- when I read that, it makes me wonder if Rachel isn't the crazy one. Is there room for that kind of ambiguity (not necessarily through the whole thing -- we can still find out at the end that Gabe's the crazy one) or should it be clear from the outset who's crazy?

Methane Madness

I'm kind of tired of the "corporation" being evil.

Oh, true dat. Unfortunately, if I were to hold off on posting that background until I had something more original... well, I'd still be writing it. :-)

What if the mistake that killed the people really was his fault?

Actually, what I was trying for with that writeup was something that could be interpreted different ways -- he could've been framed, but maybe he really was to blame. But I guess that didn't come through. (Or I guess what you're saying is that he takes responsibility for it upfront. That's cool, too.)

I see this like the process in the Spanish Prisoner: MacGuffin.

I didn't care for that movie, but I hear what you're saying, and it reminds me of one the better bits, IIRC: Someone (Campbell Scott?) writes a dollar amount on a chalkboard -- how much the company stood to gain from his magic process -- but all we can see is the dollar sign. That'd be nice if we could get away with that kind of narrative elision with regards to the science experiment.